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Smoke Rings Chapter 1: (one shot)
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1: (one shot)

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Smoke Rings

Chapter 1 of 1

Melenka

Sometimes, the end can be a beginning.

Drabble/100-Word compliant post-DH/DH Saturday Night Drabbles 663 Words 1 Chapter Complete
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The last traces of sunset reflected in the lake. Sheltered in a small strand of trees, Angelina drew in the silence and let out a stream of smoke. She’d not done this in some time, but it felt divine. Just the thing to keep her brain from spinning. She took another drag of the cigarette and made smoke rings. Lifting her wand, she changed them into dancers, swirling about before they dissolved into nothingness. She’d felt just like that when he’d left her.

“What the devil do you think you’re doing?”

She had heard that voice every day for years. It rolled over her, sent her soaring, chasing after something she couldn’t have.

“Smoking, Wood. You’re not that daft.” She took another drag, letting it go with no fancy tricks.

“I didn’t know you smoked. You never did at school.” Oliver stepped up beside her. In the dim evening, she couldn’t make out his expression.

“Not usually. I found a few times to sneak out. Mostly before exams. A whole pack before my O.W.L.s. That was mad. Thought I’d die of coughing before morning. I quit once I graduated.”

“Yet here you are,” he said. “Chain smoking, from the look of things.”

“It seemed the thing to do.”

“That bad, is it?”

“What do you care?” She bristled.

“Just asking after a friend, is all.”

“If you were a friend, you’d know what was wrong. Haven’t heard from you since you joined Puddlemere United. Figured you were too good for us, yeah?” She knew her anger was misplaced.

He didn’t rise to the bait. “It wasn’t like that. I just thought…” He looked away.

“You thought what?”

“I thought it best if I left you alone, after everything that happened in the war.”

“The war never ended for me.” She dropped her cigarette and ground it into the dirt.

“Nor for any of us, I’d wager.” He sighed. “If you’d rather I left you be, I’ll go.”

She crossed her arms over her chest, protecting her heart so she could speak. “George left. Said he couldn’t do it anymore. Just like that. Roxanne’s at school, so I walked out, too. Haven’t been home since.”

“Stupid prat.” Oliver shook his head.

It took her a moment to realize he wasn’t talking about her. “I don’t even know what I did. Whatever it was that set him off, I missed it.”

“Maybe it wasn’t you. He’s always been a bit off. One too many bludgers to the head in his youth.”

“I’d like to send one flying his way now,” she spat.

“Think I’d like to see that. You always were the better player.” His smile shone in the darkness.

“Flattery, Wood? That’s not like you.”

“We all grow up, Angelina. Even me.” He shrugged. “I’m sorry it didn’t work out for you. That’s always hard.”

“Yeah. I just wish I’d known.”

“Will you hit me if I say it’s his loss?”

“Probably.” She grinned at him.

“What I really mean to say is that it’s my gain.”

“How do you figure?” Caution flared.

“Well, here you are. And here I am. And you have something I want.”

She was afraid she really would have to hit him. “Oh, what’s that?”

“A light.” He pulled out a pack of smokes and shook one out.

She laughed, tossing him a lighter. He fumbled the catch, but recovered.

“You’re no Seeker,” she said.

“Maybe I can learn.” He handed her back the lighter, holding onto her hand just a bit longer than necessary.

“I might like to see that,” she said, glad her voice didn’t falter.

Surrounded by smoke and the comfort of something undefined, they watched the moon rise.


For my friend, because she asked.


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Latest 25 Reviews for Smoke Rings

13 Reviews  |  7.54/10 Average

9/10

etherealizabeth

This was very nicely done! I liked the smoke rings, especially. Good work.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thank you!  I'm pleased that you liked it.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thank you!  I'm pleased that you liked it.

10/10

HogwartsClassof91

What a lovely treat!  You continue to surprise and impress me with the depth of your talent.  I could so clearly see the smoke rings in the beginning, dancing around before her.  I love how you gave us a glimpse of something so frivolous—so feminine—within her character despite all her tough dialogue.  And speaking of dialogue, that was perfect as well!  Fabulous story, my dear!!

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thank you so much.  Coming from you, that means a lot.  This one sort of flowed through me.  Not entirely sure where it came from, but I'm so pleased you like it. :)

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thank you so much.  Coming from you, that means a lot.  This one sort of flowed through me.  Not entirely sure where it came from, but I'm so pleased you like it. :)

0/10

chloeshellie

that was cute malenks

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thanks! 

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thanks! 

0/10

Elise_Wanderer

I'm very glad she did ask.  She sent me here, and it was a very nice visit.  Good job!

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thank you!  I'm happy you decided to take a look and glad you enjoyed it.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thank you!  I'm happy you decided to take a look and glad you enjoyed it.

10/10

Muggline

Nice and sweet - thank you!

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

My pleasure. :)  I have to prove I can do sweet once in awhile.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

My pleasure. :)  I have to prove I can do sweet once in awhile.

0/10

sunny33

That wasn't dark!  Very nice!

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

I know!  Shocker, right?  I wonder if I could do a whole story without anyone going darkity dark dark...  Glad you liked this. 

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

I know!  Shocker, right?  I wonder if I could do a whole story without anyone going darkity dark dark...  Glad you liked this. 

10/10

snitchette

For my friend, because she asked.That means you're a good friend and just for that you're to be thanked. And icing on the cake: what a sweet story. I can only hope for a better future for her.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Glad you liked this.  It was the least I could do for my friend, a story with hope and hints of love and no smut, and she insisted I share.  So I suppose the thanks go to her. :)

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Glad you liked this.  It was the least I could do for my friend, a story with hope and hints of love and no smut, and she insisted I share.  So I suppose the thanks go to her. :)

10/10

braye27

Delightful.  Good things can come from sorrow, can't they?

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

It's surprising how often that's true. Thanks for the shiny stars. :)

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

It's surprising how often that's true. Thanks for the shiny stars. :)

9/10

blue artemis

That is what you get for marrying your dead boyfriend's twin?  I'm guessing Oliver is more of a reward, though. 

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

I always thought they were suited.  So at least something good came of it.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

I always thought they were suited.  So at least something good came of it.

10/10

kittylefish

very sort of unexpected and sweet, and with a feeling of a promise of things to come. nice.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thanks!  I am glad you enjoyed it. 

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thanks!  I am glad you enjoyed it. 

10/10

karelia

So absolutely perfect. Thank you. You made my evening!

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

I am so happy you like it!  Just goes to show that I can write sweet when motivated.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

I am so happy you like it!  Just goes to show that I can write sweet when motivated.

10/10

Arabella Bloodgood

You are such an awesome friend because that was great.  Brilliant idea.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thank you.  The minor characters get little love, and I have always been particularly fond of Oliver.  I thought he deserved a shot at love, however nascent.  And only he would think to use Quidditch as a flirtation device. ;)

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

Thank you.  The minor characters get little love, and I have always been particularly fond of Oliver.  I thought he deserved a shot at love, however nascent.  And only he would think to use Quidditch as a flirtation device. ;)

10/10

mick42

Great to see two such underused characters.

Response from Melenka (Author of Smoke Rings)

I prefer to write minor character, since JKR has left plenty of room to play with their personalities. Thanks for reading and for the review. :)

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