I was already excited when I read the summary :)

And now, I'm very happy. This was another brilliant chapter.

I'm still completely enthralled by your characterizations! It's like I'm right there alongside them as they grow and mature :) 

And concerning how James is using Pepper to get to Lily... ooh, that makes me mad. But it's quite believable. And I hope Pepper doesn't make too big a mess of things... though that little scene with Severus... hmm, doesn't bode well.

And I have to mention how much I loved the way your wrote Severus' reaction to seeing Tobias. Everything was so dramatic and just heart-wrenching. 

Oh! And of course, the chapter's ending was so sweet. Absolutely wonderful :) The expression on my face while reading it looked something like this -->

I loved this line (one of many that I loved): He did not release her, but hugged her clumsily, seeming to fumble about for acceptable places to rest his hands. Very realistic. And I can imagine Severus being like that. 

Anyways, here's to another amazing chapter!

And of course, good luck with the next chapters

Man, I love these smiley things, haha!

Aww! This was a great chapter, from disastrous (the meeting with Snape Sr.) to the sweet, heartthrobbing moment inside the Kingdom.  I know it won't last (sob*) but it was nice seeing it written down.  A bit of sweetness in Severus' taciturn life.  Lovely!

You had me in tears with this rollercoaster of a chapter. Poor little Stephy and such a tragedy for that family, only to be compounded by Tobias leaving. The confrontation between Severus and his dad was so powerfully written. Tobias is first-rate jerk for naming his new daughter Stephy - as if he's trying to replace the daughter who died.

The first kiss was beautiful. *happy sigh*

Lovely as always, my dear. I think this chapter is my favorite, thus far.

Ah, the arrival of the Marauders!  James is a prat.  And they invaded the Kingdom! Even bigger prats.  Poor Severus!  His safe place invaded by the enemy.  His destruction of the Kingdom was powerfully written, his anger and resentment and pain was palpable.  I'm relieved that Lily went to Severus and fixed things.  Whew!  The medallions are very clever and are a good way for her to show Severus how much she values his friendship. 

Have I mentioned how much I adore Pepper?  Well, maybe not her exactly, but how you've written her.  What a fabulous job of fleshing out a minor character in canon.  

You know how much I adore this story, dearest. The relationship between the sisters is wonderfully written and feels so real. Their friendship with Severus is beginning to solidify, which is fun to watch, particularly the scene with them wrestling around on the floor. The interaction between Severus and his mum was heartbreaking. I love how you show just subtle hints of the adults they will become.

Grrrr. Potter. Grrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr. 

It's so wonderful that Lily understands Severus! That she understood it was his safe place and what it meant to him to have it invaded! And the explanation of Severus' nickname is great! I've wondered for a long time where "Snivellus" came from, exactly.

I cannot wait for chapter 4! 

This was so worth the bit of wait.

The parts with James and Sirius were amusing. But I was angry when they showed up and started harassing Lily and Pepper (I don't even think of her as Petunia anymore :D). The scenes were all really well written.

Again, your characterization is absolutely wonderful. Severus is just perfectly written. Just how I would imagine him as a teenager. And when Sirius was describing Severus' appearance... I loved it :D Especially this part: Whispers regarding Snape’s newly-deepened, silkily-snide voice had been heard from the girls in their year, but Sirius could see no factors to mitigate the unprepossessing appearance of the acerbic Slytherin. Wow, haha ;)

Oh and I loved that Lily went to go see Severus! It was a really great scene and I smiled when she hugged him :) 

Last thing... When I was reading your description of the flag.... oooh, I was tempted and inspired a bit. Perhaps, just maybe, I'll draw a picture of it someday :) It would be sort of difficult since I don't draw animals too often... but if, if, I ever do get to drawing it... I'll be sure to tell you.

Anyways, well done! And good luck writing in the future :)

This is a lovely friendship story, even if we know it is doomed to fail in the future.  Bittersweet.  I'm looking forward to the next chapter. 

What a lovely first chapter! I was wondering when you'd upload your Snily story :) And now, here it is.

First of all, I'm so glad that you're writing this story, because it begs to be told. For sure. 

It may only be the first chapter, but I'm already loving your characterization of Severus and Lily. And I loved this: Smirking, Severus vaulted over the wall ...  ‘Show off,’ Pepper muttered, turning and stomping away. So great :D 

Oh and I loved the Narnia and Mr. Tumnus reference :) This was also lovely:  ‘What have you found?’ Lily demanded, apparently suspicious of the expression on his face. ‘Oh, just another world,’ Severus said tauntingly. Ahh, tauntingly; very much like him to say something like that.

Alright, done rambling. I love it! I wish you good luck with this story. And I anticipate the next chapter :) 

Oooo!  This promises to be a cool story, can't wait to see what happens next.  :)

OMG!!! I LOVE your stories! I was kinda dissapointed that it wasn't HG/SS, but that's OK, 'cause you rock!!

Author's Response: Thank you, mrsdan!  It's not SS/HG, but it is a prelude to SS/HG - he had to become the sarcastic bastard we love, somehow.

mrsdan's response: Of course!!

I love stories about Severus as a child. Not many dare to attempt it properly though. Usually it's just a hint at his past or brief segments. Will be looking forward to finding out what else you have created for him.

Very curious - why did you choose to make Lily and Petunia fraternal twins?

I was thrilled this morning to see that you had written a story.  Your writing is superb.  I will add this to my favorite stories and will await chapter 2. 

*creeps in*I was so nervous when I clickety clicked the link.  Even though I know how completely brill you are, I just didn't know what to expect.  Your story is off to a great start.  I await Camelot, I mean the next chapter. 

A good start to your story, and I look forward to more!

This feels good - I really enjoy reading teenage Lily and Severus so far :-) And looks like you're planning on making us like Petunia, too. Love the nickname, for one.

 And Camelot? Looking forward to see what happens!

*settles in for the ride* 

Oh boy oh boy oh boy, another Subversa fic...I've been feeling deprived since the last one ended.  Yay!  Off to a lovely start.

What a wonderful beginning!  I can't wait to read more!

Bravo Subversa Bravo!!!! 

Is The Love You Take the story you refer to in your Authors Notes? Btw, I love this story, it had me almost in tears several times, & good work on getting most of the things that happened in DH right seeing as you wrote 90% of this before it was released. It's very sad, but still, amazing, I've never read a severus/Lily story before, preferring Hermione/Severus mostly & I really like this one. Top effort.Cheers!~Bree

Wow. This story picked up a lot in the later chapters and ended up being a really good tale! Very nice!!

*sobs*

A tragically wonderful tale.  It could so easily have happened this way.  Beautifully written as usual.

How utterly, utterly, heart wrenching! I was in a total haze as I read everyone of your carefully crafted words.There is so very much I want to say but I am still in limbo with my emotions right now.Well done for rendering me speechless (which isn't an easy task)BRAVO, my dear friend, BRAVO.Love Sonia

Oh this is tearing me apart. I really feel for Severus and I guess that is what you are trying to do with your exceptional writing.I cried when Severus and the girls went to meet his father who pretty much said he didn't want him. When he lifted up his shirt to show off his grandfathers handywork, I bawled like a baby. You are trying to wrench my heart from my chest aren't you? I can see how hard this was to write for you, and I commend you for seeing it through.Off to read the next chapter, with my trusty box of tissues next to me. Well done on the closing scene of this chapter.Love Sonia