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For Him

1: For Him

2: Visions of Another Mind

3: When Needs Must...

4: ... The Devil Rides.

5: Confluence

6: Tea and Sympathy

7: Ouroboros

8: Meeting of Minds

9: Conspiracies

10: Epiphany

11: The Key

12: Mixed Blessings

13: Loose Lips

14: Silence

15: Release

16: Weeding

17: Friends and Feathers

18: Charges

19: Give and Take

20: Message Received

21: Change of Pace

22: Coming Together

23: Wrapping Gifts

24: House Hunting

25: Onto Greener Grass

26: When One Door Closes

For Him

sweetflag

267 Reviews   |   267 Ratings, 0 Likes, 92 Favorites )

Mystery/Suspense Drama Horror Potter Place Fun 57,895 Words 26 Chapters WIP
Hermione Granger Severus Snape Minerva McGonagall Original Character Lucius Malfoy Bellatrix Lestrange Draco Malfoy Harry Potter Narcissa Malfoy Ronald Weasley

When Hermione discovers that an incurable Snape has been left to waste in a secret hospital ward, she sets out to do what so many have failed to do before and cure him.

This is my response to the Dictionary Drabble Challenge. The chapters have to be less than one thousand words and contain the listed words.

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Chapters (26)

Chapter 1: For Him

Chapter 2: Visions of Another Mind

Chapter 3: When Needs Must...

Chapter 4: ... The Devil Rides.

Chapter 5: Confluence

Chapter 6: Tea and Sympathy

Chapter 7: Ouroboros

Chapter 8: Meeting of Minds

Chapter 9: Conspiracies

Chapter 10: Epiphany

Chapter 11: The Key

Chapter 12: Mixed Blessings

Chapter 13: Loose Lips

Chapter 14: Silence

Chapter 15: Release

Chapter 16: Weeding

Chapter 17: Friends and Feathers

Chapter 18: Charges

Chapter 19: Give and Take

Chapter 20: Message Received

Chapter 21: Change of Pace

Chapter 22: Coming Together

Chapter 23: Wrapping Gifts

Chapter 24: House Hunting

Chapter 25: Onto Greener Grass

Chapter 26: When One Door Closes


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Member Since 2007  |  27 Stories  |  Favorited by 35  |  180 Reviews Written  |  1,104 Review Responses

Hello.  I love reading and writing... what more can I say?

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10/10

Maddie

Nooooo. And who is torturing Snape if Bella is in the Muggle world?

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

I know, it's terrible, isn't it? :DThe only person who can--Snape himself!I know that it was ages and ages ago when I wrote the chapter in question, so I'll give a quick jog to the memory.  Bella was ruminating about Snape, and she was satisfied that Nagini's venom would be slowly seeping into his brain, twisting his mind and perceptions  slowly driving him insane.  Snape is creating his own hell and his own punishments at the moment.Hope that was helpful :)Thanks for the review and staying with the story :)

0/10

kimjo2

dispair, fear, terror.  you write them so well.  powerful update.  thanks so much

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the compliment :)And thank you for staying with the story :)

9/10

morgaine_dulac

Poor Snape is losing it, ain't he?But yay for Bella! I know that I come off as being as insane as she, but I like her ;-)Cheers. /M

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Yep! Snape is beginning to lose it, but Hermione and the others are so close... almost right where they need to be.Bella is very hard to write, but she's growing on me :)Thanks for the review.

9/10

debjunk

Major uh-oh's there!  I'm not liking what I'm sure Bella's planning!  Poor Severus.  What a horrible existence.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review and the stars :)  Severus... yes... he's having a tough time, and a tougher one looms.

10/10

makaem

This doesn't look good for Hermione. Has she told anyone else where she is going?

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Only Lucius knows... Will he find out about Meadowes before the weekend?  LOL... I'm getting excited about the possibilities now! Thank you for the review and the stars :) 

0/10

ClayPotter

Oh dear! Will Bella possess Hermione? If so, will she try to kill Snape, or drive him deeper into insanity?Such evil in only a finger! Reminds me of Plankton from Sponge Bob Square Pants! So much evil packed into such a small space.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review :)I think that Bella will stick with her original plan for the time being.  But either of those are great options.  They'll go on her to-do list :D

10/10

makaem

Great story.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for reading through and reviewing :)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for reading through and reviewing :)

9/10

debjunk

Poor Cissy.  It's hard to imagine the Malfoys in such dire straits.  It must be very hard for them to deal with it, having had so much before.  What's up with the snake?

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

It's odd, but I had the idea that they had nothing in those latter years under Voldemort's wing.  I imagined that their wealth and home were all 'donated' to the cause.  Money can sort all manner of things, and I fancied that Voldemort was using Malfoy as his own personal bank.  I think that towards the end, all they had was each other.  The problem now, is that they have no protection and no leverage... no power.   

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

It's odd, but I had the idea that they had nothing in those latter years under Voldemort's wing.  I imagined that their wealth and home were all 'donated' to the cause.  Money can sort all manner of things, and I fancied that Voldemort was using Malfoy as his own personal bank.  I think that towards the end, all they had was each other.  The problem now, is that they have no protection and no leverage... no power.   

0/10

kimjo2

wonderful use of the words!  and all the other ones you used, too.  thanks so much

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you once again :)  You are welcome.  I hope that the next drabbles continue to appeal. :)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you once again :)  You are welcome.  I hope that the next drabbles continue to appeal. :)

10/10

ClayPotter

Very interesting. Now I am, once again, at the edge of my seat to see where you go with this.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review :)  Simply, the next thing is the potion.. oh, and Bella getting what she needs from Meadowes :D  Thank you so much for staying with the story.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review :)  Simply, the next thing is the potion.. oh, and Bella getting what she needs from Meadowes :D  Thank you so much for staying with the story.

10/10

Maddie

The Wizarding World seems like a terrifying place to be without access to ones magic. Lucius was set up. That worm of a vendor.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Definitely!  Lucius is suffering.  The vendor was very nasty--a typical parasite!  It's all looking up for him now, though... isn't it? :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Definitely!  Lucius is suffering.  The vendor was very nasty--a typical parasite!  It's all looking up for him now, though... isn't it? :D

0/10

debjunk

Interesting to see Lucius scared by his fellow comrades.  Hopefully everything will work as he hopes and Severus will awaken and divulge whatever secrets he's referring to.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

He's vulnerable; he has no wand and no allies.  Everything has shifted for him.  His wealth and family home have been confiscated; his future line has been severed, and to cap it all, the one who could possibly give him some semblance of an existance back is comatose.  Even if evyerthing goes his way though, he will always have his enemies and his regrets.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

He's vulnerable; he has no wand and no allies.  Everything has shifted for him.  His wealth and family home have been confiscated; his future line has been severed, and to cap it all, the one who could possibly give him some semblance of an existance back is comatose.  Even if evyerthing goes his way though, he will always have his enemies and his regrets.

10/10

beaweasley2

OH, Lucius is now uncomfortable in what used to be his element? Cool. Hope Hermione has equal luck getting Draco to talk to her as Lucius did escaping the thugs.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Both Draco and Lucius are feeling uncomfortable in what used to be their elements.  Draco is faring worse than Lucius, and Hermione will find that catching up with Draco is the least of her worries.  *evil grin*Thank you for reviewing :) and staying with the drabble.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Both Draco and Lucius are feeling uncomfortable in what used to be their elements.  Draco is faring worse than Lucius, and Hermione will find that catching up with Draco is the least of her worries.  *evil grin*Thank you for reviewing :) and staying with the drabble.

10/10

morgaine_dulac

Now I am really scared for Severus.Love how you make Lucius and Narcissa interact. I've always seen them as two people who have married for status, but you make it seem as if they actually love each other.Looking forward to reading more soon. /M

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Do not fret for Severus; he's actually relatively okay at the moment... certainly safer than he was while Bella was on the ward wth him :)I thought as you do--that they were a trophy couple--but as I read the closing chapters of Deathly Hallows, it seemed that they just wanted to get out of there alive.  Given what I've put them through in this story, then a deep affection would have developed out of sheer need for each other.  Saying that, I wanted to try out the idea that despite being a Death Eater and a general nasty man to the general population that he was a decent human being to those that mattered to him.  I think that I've missed some drabbles along the way... I shall go and hunt them down!Thank you for reading and leaving a review :) 

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Do not fret for Severus; he's actually relatively okay at the moment... certainly safer than he was while Bella was on the ward wth him :)I thought as you do--that they were a trophy couple--but as I read the closing chapters of Deathly Hallows, it seemed that they just wanted to get out of there alive.  Given what I've put them through in this story, then a deep affection would have developed out of sheer need for each other.  Saying that, I wanted to try out the idea that despite being a Death Eater and a general nasty man to the general population that he was a decent human being to those that mattered to him.  I think that I've missed some drabbles along the way... I shall go and hunt them down!Thank you for reading and leaving a review :) 

0/10

sunny33

A gorse mattress. Oww!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

It does sound really uncomfortable, but the feathers and his coat would act as a reasonable protection, and in that situation, hypothermia would cause him more harm than a few prickles.  Thanks for the review :)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

It does sound really uncomfortable, but the feathers and his coat would act as a reasonable protection, and in that situation, hypothermia would cause him more harm than a few prickles.  Thanks for the review :)

0/10

sunny33

He understood. that's what she needs

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

I'm not quite sure what Lucius was thinking at that point... was he just serving an end, or did he genuinely want to help Hermione?Thanks for the review

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

I'm not quite sure what Lucius was thinking at that point... was he just serving an end, or did he genuinely want to help Hermione?Thanks for the review

0/10

sunny33

would strong occlumency shields keep her out? Fix Sev and send him in to do the deed?Or a flamethrower.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.  Flamethrower... that's an idea!  It's not true legilemency; she can put her entire self into the mind of the other person and not just her mind.  Imagine that her soul was severed when she was hit with the Killing curse, but her soul never left this place.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.  Flamethrower... that's an idea!  It's not true legilemency; she can put her entire self into the mind of the other person and not just her mind.  Imagine that her soul was severed when she was hit with the Killing curse, but her soul never left this place.

0/10

sunny33

She is a very nasty... thing.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

She is rather nasty... and she seems to have all the advantages at the moment.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

She is rather nasty... and she seems to have all the advantages at the moment.

9/10

debjunk

And here I thought we would have a break from Her Most Evil Highness.  Oh well, can't have everything.  Maybe now that Severus realizes he's in hell, he might be able to get himself out of it.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.Ermm... yes!  I was struggling with 'verbiage' and Bella popped up to save the day... sorry!Here's hoping, but he's a moody, melancholic man, and it may suit him to wallow.  He has a big nose to cut off to spite his face... :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review.Ermm... yes!  I was struggling with 'verbiage' and Bella popped up to save the day... sorry!Here's hoping, but he's a moody, melancholic man, and it may suit him to wallow.  He has a big nose to cut off to spite his face... :D

0/10

kimjo2

i have to say it again...you have a genuine "panache" with these words!  thanks so much

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Aww... thank you,

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

:)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Aww... thank you,

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

:)

10/10

beaweasley2

Ah, poor Meadows. He should have been more forthright and he might have stood a chance. Good use of the words. I hope Lucius and Hermione figure things out soon.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  He should have been, the poor man, but he was too content to live in the past, and too ashamed of his folly in trusting Bella to help him put Dorcas to rest.  Lucius and Hermione will get a huge hint pretty soon to help them figure things out *evil laugh*

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  He should have been, the poor man, but he was too content to live in the past, and too ashamed of his folly in trusting Bella to help him put Dorcas to rest.  Lucius and Hermione will get a huge hint pretty soon to help them figure things out *evil laugh*

10/10

ClayPotter

Wonderfully written. I felt as if I was there, almost one of them, inside their minds. Great job!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the stars.  I'm incredibly delighted that you're enjoying this story. *bounces around happily*

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the stars.  I'm incredibly delighted that you're enjoying this story. *bounces around happily*

9/10

Maddie

Now is seems that Severus can effectively torture himself without Bella's influence.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Yes!  I am so glad that you spotted that... All the harder for Hermione when she gets into his head.  Thank you for staying with the story... can't say how thrilled and humbled I am that you're still here :)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Yes!  I am so glad that you spotted that... All the harder for Hermione when she gets into his head.  Thank you for staying with the story... can't say how thrilled and humbled I am that you're still here :)

10/10

morgaine_dulac

Wow, I would never have thought that I would feel sorry for Lucius Malfoy. Bravo for provoking that feeling in me.Loved Snape's thoughts about Lily, especially He had lived and almost died for her, and she had given him nothing, and she never would! Nice to see that he finally got that!And Bella, marvellously creepy as ever.Cheers. /M

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review and the stars.  Odd, eh?  Hitting him where it really hurts... his future and the future of a pureblood line. I didn't think that I'd feel sorry for him either, but I do... but thereagain, I know why he needs Severus.Snape is on that slippery slope as he starts to adjust to the situation... remember that he still has the venom in him!I did say that you'd have a break from Bella, but I was struggling with the word 'verbiage'... strange that Bella should have come to the rescue! lolThanks for staying with this drabble. 

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks for the review and the stars.  Odd, eh?  Hitting him where it really hurts... his future and the future of a pureblood line. I didn't think that I'd feel sorry for him either, but I do... but thereagain, I know why he needs Severus.Snape is on that slippery slope as he starts to adjust to the situation... remember that he still has the venom in him!I did say that you'd have a break from Bella, but I was struggling with the word 'verbiage'... strange that Bella should have come to the rescue! lolThanks for staying with this drabble. 

0/10

kimjo2

wow...that was powerful.  strong use of the words, too.  thanks so much.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

.  I'm thrilled that you're enjoying this.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thanks

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

.  I'm thrilled that you're enjoying this.

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