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For Him

1: For Him

2: Visions of Another Mind

3: When Needs Must...

4: ... The Devil Rides.

5: Confluence

6: Tea and Sympathy

7: Ouroboros

8: Meeting of Minds

9: Conspiracies

10: Epiphany

11: The Key

12: Mixed Blessings

13: Loose Lips

14: Silence

15: Release

16: Weeding

17: Friends and Feathers

18: Charges

19: Give and Take

20: Message Received

21: Change of Pace

22: Coming Together

23: Wrapping Gifts

24: House Hunting

25: Onto Greener Grass

26: When One Door Closes

For Him

sweetflag

267 Reviews   |   267 Ratings, 0 Likes, 92 Favorites )

Mystery/Suspense Drama Horror Potter Place Fun 57,895 Words 26 Chapters WIP
Hermione Granger Severus Snape Minerva McGonagall Original Character Lucius Malfoy Bellatrix Lestrange Draco Malfoy Harry Potter Narcissa Malfoy Ronald Weasley

When Hermione discovers that an incurable Snape has been left to waste in a secret hospital ward, she sets out to do what so many have failed to do before and cure him.

This is my response to the Dictionary Drabble Challenge. The chapters have to be less than one thousand words and contain the listed words.

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Chapters (26)

Chapter 1: For Him

Chapter 2: Visions of Another Mind

Chapter 3: When Needs Must...

Chapter 4: ... The Devil Rides.

Chapter 5: Confluence

Chapter 6: Tea and Sympathy

Chapter 7: Ouroboros

Chapter 8: Meeting of Minds

Chapter 9: Conspiracies

Chapter 10: Epiphany

Chapter 11: The Key

Chapter 12: Mixed Blessings

Chapter 13: Loose Lips

Chapter 14: Silence

Chapter 15: Release

Chapter 16: Weeding

Chapter 17: Friends and Feathers

Chapter 18: Charges

Chapter 19: Give and Take

Chapter 20: Message Received

Chapter 21: Change of Pace

Chapter 22: Coming Together

Chapter 23: Wrapping Gifts

Chapter 24: House Hunting

Chapter 25: Onto Greener Grass

Chapter 26: When One Door Closes


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Hello.  I love reading and writing... what more can I say?

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9/10

MoreThanSirius

Well, I'm concerned that she has agreed to work with Malfoy so quickly. Hermione seems to have lost her sense of caution as her need to cure Snape has grown.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Hermione is in trouble, you are quite right.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Hermione is in trouble, you are quite right.

10/10

MoreThanSirius

Excellent! I like the new format very much. Having three drabbles together has allowed for much more information and plot development. Now Hermione is determined to help Meadowes with his plan and Malfoy has no choice but to assist them. I am concerned about the power of Bellatrix's mind. She was quite insane before all this began. Now she is driven by the need for revenge and has nothing to lose.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you.  Unfortunately, this format was due to the use of drabble challenges before I started and as a result, the subsequent chapters will follow the original format.... sorry.  Bella gets slightly more scary, and then she will become awesome... hell hath no fury, etc...

Response from MoreThanSirius (Reviewer)

Oh, the original format is fine. It's just rather restrictive when starting a new story because it's difficult to get a lot of information across in short segments. You have a rather complex story to tell. I think this set of drabbles answered a lot of readers' questions and now that we have the situation firmly in mind, it will be much easier to go forward one drabble at a time.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

I'm relieved that you're fine with the original format :)  It is becoming complex; I just had an idea of what I wanted to happen, and it seemed so simple in my head! lol.  Next set of words should be available soon, and then I can crack on with answering more of your questions.  I'm thrilled that you're enjoying this :)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you.  Unfortunately, this format was due to the use of drabble challenges before I started and as a result, the subsequent chapters will follow the original format.... sorry.  Bella gets slightly more scary, and then she will become awesome... hell hath no fury, etc...

Response from MoreThanSirius (Reviewer)

Oh, the original format is fine. It's just rather restrictive when starting a new story because it's difficult to get a lot of information across in short segments. You have a rather complex story to tell. I think this set of drabbles answered a lot of readers' questions and now that we have the situation firmly in mind, it will be much easier to go forward one drabble at a time.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

I'm relieved that you're fine with the original format :)  It is becoming complex; I just had an idea of what I wanted to happen, and it seemed so simple in my head! lol.  Next set of words should be available soon, and then I can crack on with answering more of your questions.  I'm thrilled that you're enjoying this :)

9/10

MoreThanSirius

Well, that has cleared up a few things. Although, I must admit, I have no idea exactly what Mr. Meadowes has planned. I am more than a bit worried for Severus, though.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the rewiew and the rating.  Be worried for Snape... be very worried!  He his in his own hell, and will never believe that he isn't.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the rewiew and the rating.  Be worried for Snape... be very worried!  He his in his own hell, and will never believe that he isn't.

0/10

MollysSister

I hope Malfoy's first suggestion is to move Severus to the manor!Why did Draco want the snake that attempted murder?

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  I wish that he could, but the Ministry have taken his assets--Malfoy is on the equivalent of welfare!  Gotta smile at that!Basically, Draco wanted the snake in the hopes of identifying who sent it. 

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  I wish that he could, but the Ministry have taken his assets--Malfoy is on the equivalent of welfare!  Gotta smile at that!Basically, Draco wanted the snake in the hopes of identifying who sent it. 

10/10

blue artemis

That was quite interesting, and I wonder why the boys have finally made an appearance. 

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  I have this habit of talking through proposed chapters with my Mum (thankfully she's more Harry Potter potty than I am!), and while drinking tea and scoffing her biscuits one afternoon, she suddenly burst out laughing.  She looked at me and asked me to repeat what I'd just said; I did as I was told, and then it sinks in what I've just suggested--that is why the boys are in the story!  I know that doesn't answer your question in any way, shape or form, but I can say that there will be some... interesting outcomes as a result of bringing the boys into it.  Personally, I can only take so much creepiness and general murkiness, and I think that Bella provides more than enough tension and creepiness by herself that a few of the other characters could afford to have some fun and lighten some aspects of this tale a little.For the time being, the tone will remain as it is... I still have so much to write about, especially about the landscape (mindscape?) that Snape has created... and what do you think he could imagine to torment himself with? *evil smirk*Thank you for staying with this drabble, I know that it must seem agonisingly slow given that it comes out in 1,000 word snippets.... so my gratitude to your patience :)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  I have this habit of talking through proposed chapters with my Mum (thankfully she's more Harry Potter potty than I am!), and while drinking tea and scoffing her biscuits one afternoon, she suddenly burst out laughing.  She looked at me and asked me to repeat what I'd just said; I did as I was told, and then it sinks in what I've just suggested--that is why the boys are in the story!  I know that doesn't answer your question in any way, shape or form, but I can say that there will be some... interesting outcomes as a result of bringing the boys into it.  Personally, I can only take so much creepiness and general murkiness, and I think that Bella provides more than enough tension and creepiness by herself that a few of the other characters could afford to have some fun and lighten some aspects of this tale a little.For the time being, the tone will remain as it is... I still have so much to write about, especially about the landscape (mindscape?) that Snape has created... and what do you think he could imagine to torment himself with? *evil smirk*Thank you for staying with this drabble, I know that it must seem agonisingly slow given that it comes out in 1,000 word snippets.... so my gratitude to your patience :)

9/10

Maddie

OK, I'm confused. What is Draco doing fighting off an invisible snake that he seems to have wanted to capture? Although it looked like it was killing him.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the rating.  This is my dilemma with this challenge and it is prodding me in the bum to stop and continue this as a regular story with wonderful, long chapters.  I'll tell you this, the snake was killing Draco, and Draco needed it because he wanted to see if he could find out who had sent it--quite simply, who his potential murderer was.  Now that the Malfoy family are worse than the lowliest wizard, their allegiances well-known, and the apparent lack of suitable punishment being rubbed in the face of the suffering populace, there are those who are not satisfied--they wish the Malfoys to suffer the same. 

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the rating.  This is my dilemma with this challenge and it is prodding me in the bum to stop and continue this as a regular story with wonderful, long chapters.  I'll tell you this, the snake was killing Draco, and Draco needed it because he wanted to see if he could find out who had sent it--quite simply, who his potential murderer was.  Now that the Malfoy family are worse than the lowliest wizard, their allegiances well-known, and the apparent lack of suitable punishment being rubbed in the face of the suffering populace, there are those who are not satisfied--they wish the Malfoys to suffer the same. 

0/10

Wahoo and Wesleyanne

I sympathize with you at the slowness of 1000 word chapters!  When I wrote my Dictionary drabble, I thought it would be 3 parts. but it ended up 7 since there was the 1000-word limit.  Thanks for the mysterious story, which I am enjoying very much!-Wahoo

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

I can see this lasting for years!  I have so much going on now--my fault as I tend to delve a lot--that writing the short chapters is almost painful... like dying to tell that secret! lol  Hope you enjoy the next... it's not quite as creepy, but has another little mystery in it :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

I can see this lasting for years!  I have so much going on now--my fault as I tend to delve a lot--that writing the short chapters is almost painful... like dying to tell that secret! lol  Hope you enjoy the next... it's not quite as creepy, but has another little mystery in it :D

10/10

pookah

Good for you, lots of information.  I like seeing Harry and Ron as well as Hermione, I liked geting information on Snape and especially the evil Bellatrix. That was creepy as all get out.   thanks for the extra long chapter!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

I love creepy!  *evil grin*

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

I love creepy!  *evil grin*

10/10

pookah

clearing some things up here, but still an intruiging tale!  Thanks so much for this interesting story.  The dictionary challenge is  always neat.  Well done.  hurrying on to the next chapter.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

:)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

:)

0/10

MollysSister

I hope the begining of the chapter was from Snape's POV. I want him to get better.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Ermmm... Oh dear!  Let me have my fun with him first :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Ermmm... Oh dear!  Let me have my fun with him first :D

10/10

blue artemis

Well, he doesn't know about the portkey, so there is that.  Anyway, good chapter.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  The next one is in the queue; I hope that you enjoy that one too... more snakes in it! :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  The next one is in the queue; I hope that you enjoy that one too... more snakes in it! :D

0/10

sunny33

you made the water sound delicious!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Thank you... it made me thirsty writing about it.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Thank you... it made me thirsty writing about it.

10/10

emmeline33

Looking forward to seeing how this evolves; it's been thrilling thus far.  Great use of the prescribed words!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Thank you so much; I'm having great fun with this... but I am wondering whether to bypass the challenge and write this as a regular story; what started out as a bit of fun has really grown into something a bit bigger than I expected... bit like a puppy that was supposed to be a terrier but ended up a rottweiler... lol.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Thank you so much; I'm having great fun with this... but I am wondering whether to bypass the challenge and write this as a regular story; what started out as a bit of fun has really grown into something a bit bigger than I expected... bit like a puppy that was supposed to be a terrier but ended up a rottweiler... lol.

10/10

snitchette

Snape, an obsession? Every normal girl wouldn't have such an obsession with him, wouldn't we? ;p

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Perfectly normal, in my opinion; in fact, obsession is too a strong word for it... how about... anticipated? lol

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Perfectly normal, in my opinion; in fact, obsession is too a strong word for it... how about... anticipated? lol

8/10

la Chatelaine

 **tap, tap, tap**  While I'm glad Severus has water, I feel like I'm being tortured by being nibbled to death by ducks.  Could we please have longer chapters?  Other than that, love the story. 

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Sorry about your slow death, but this is a drabble challenge and all chapters have to be less than 1,000 words.  I just said in an earlier review that so much is being shunted onto the next chapter that I'm having trouble keeping my patience with it.... I so want to go wild and write a decent length chapter... lol.  See how the next chapter (in queue now) goes, and if you still feel threatened by nibbling ducks, then I will withdraw from the challenge and write this as a regular story.Thank you for the compliment :)

Response from la Chatelaine (Reviewer)

Sorry, didn't know or (more likely) forgot about the challenge. **so embarassed**

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Awww... don't be :)  I'm still smiling that despite the short, killer duck chapters, you're still reading this story :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review.  Sorry about your slow death, but this is a drabble challenge and all chapters have to be less than 1,000 words.  I just said in an earlier review that so much is being shunted onto the next chapter that I'm having trouble keeping my patience with it.... I so want to go wild and write a decent length chapter... lol.  See how the next chapter (in queue now) goes, and if you still feel threatened by nibbling ducks, then I will withdraw from the challenge and write this as a regular story.Thank you for the compliment :)

Response from la Chatelaine (Reviewer)

Sorry, didn't know or (more likely) forgot about the challenge. **so embarassed**

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Awww... don't be :)  I'm still smiling that despite the short, killer duck chapters, you're still reading this story :D

9/10

Maddie

At least Severus believes he has found water to survive in his dream scape or where ever he is. I think we needed a bit more of a chapter for the second part.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Hmm...getting everything out in under 1,000 words is proving to be tough, especially when I have several things going on.  The next chapter is in the queue, and if that seems in some way too... small, then I will think about quitting the Dictionary Drabble Challenge and write this as a normal story, using the drabble challenge words as a prompt rather than a directive.  I have oodles of stuff that keeps getting shunted onto the next chapter... lol.  Anyways, thank you and I hope that you enjoy the next chapter :)

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Hmm...getting everything out in under 1,000 words is proving to be tough, especially when I have several things going on.  The next chapter is in the queue, and if that seems in some way too... small, then I will think about quitting the Dictionary Drabble Challenge and write this as a normal story, using the drabble challenge words as a prompt rather than a directive.  I have oodles of stuff that keeps getting shunted onto the next chapter... lol.  Anyways, thank you and I hope that you enjoy the next chapter :)

10/10

snitchette

Now everything is crytal clear. Thank you for these brilliant drabbles.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you again :) All ready for the story to begin in earnest now.  Next drabble is in the queue; hope you enjoy it... it's a little more optimistic and gentle than the previous chapters, but still hints that all is not well. Thank you for the lovely compliment :D

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you again :) All ready for the story to begin in earnest now.  Next drabble is in the queue; hope you enjoy it... it's a little more optimistic and gentle than the previous chapters, but still hints that all is not well. Thank you for the lovely compliment :D

10/10

snitchette

Thanks for the clarification. It still stays mysterious and I love it.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  I am so glad that you're enjoying this.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  I am so glad that you're enjoying this.

10/10

pookah

BACK from the demands of Real Life!  I am going to catch up on this story.  Still confunded as to who the mysterious boss is, and think that the orderly can't be Filch because Filch has never shown (to my recollection) any affection for Hermione.I'm happy there are more chappies to read!  Thanks for writing this!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Welcome back :) So glad that you managed to sneak away from real life for a few minutes.  The next chapters will tell you, but I think that you'll guess before you get that far.... I'm really enjoying this challenge, and I'm utterly thrilled that you're enjoying this ramble.Thank you for the review, the rating and the lovely compliment... have fun!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Welcome back :) So glad that you managed to sneak away from real life for a few minutes.  The next chapters will tell you, but I think that you'll guess before you get that far.... I'm really enjoying this challenge, and I'm utterly thrilled that you're enjoying this ramble.Thank you for the review, the rating and the lovely compliment... have fun!

0/10

MollysSister

Okay who is this Meadowes guy again? Is he a healer?Bella attempting to see how much her mind control can get is litterally chilling!

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Meadowes is the elderly orderly who led Hermione out of sub rosa; he is the widower of Dorcas Meadowes.  I hope that helps :)It is a scary thought... sometimes I worry me.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Meadowes is the elderly orderly who led Hermione out of sub rosa; he is the widower of Dorcas Meadowes.  I hope that helps :)It is a scary thought... sometimes I worry me.

10/10

Maddie

Intriguing and creepy. I would like to read more.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review, the rating and the compliment :) More is on the way, I just have to wait for the next word list.  Thanks again.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review, the rating and the compliment :) More is on the way, I just have to wait for the next word list.  Thanks again.

8/10

la Chatelaine

I am enjoying the story.  The suspense and menace are about to do me in, but since that's what you're going for, I think I'll just sit back and enjoy it.  Certainly much better than summer television (yuk!  ).    Update soon, please.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Surely anything is better than summer television? lol.  I'm thrilled that you are staying with the story despite its potential danger :), and I'm even happier that you're enjoying it.  I will update as soon as I get the next word list.  Thanks again :) 

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating.  Surely anything is better than summer television? lol.  I'm thrilled that you are staying with the story despite its potential danger :), and I'm even happier that you're enjoying it.  I will update as soon as I get the next word list.  Thanks again :) 

0/10

sunny33

aha the murk clears a little, I am beginning to understand

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you so much for staying with the story despite the murk; I'm still fairly new at writing and have learnt something important through writing this, and that is, 'be clearer'... lol.  Next word list should be floating around pretty soon, and then the story will carry on...

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you so much for staying with the story despite the murk; I'm still fairly new at writing and have learnt something important through writing this, and that is, 'be clearer'... lol.  Next word list should be floating around pretty soon, and then the story will carry on...

10/10

blue artemis

Oh, that was something.  I can't wait to see what happens. 

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating :) Everyone is in place, and they know what needs to be done... sounds simple, doesn't it? lol.  Thanks for staying with the story.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Thank you for the review and the rating :) Everyone is in place, and they know what needs to be done... sounds simple, doesn't it? lol.  Thanks for staying with the story.

0/10

MollysSister

Well okay that all makes more sense then. I was a tad confused.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Hello :) The next chapter (three drabbles in one) is up--I hope that it sorts things out.

Response from sweetflag (Author of For Him)

Hello :) The next chapter (three drabbles in one) is up--I hope that it sorts things out.

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