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notsosaintly"Her breath burns my already feverish skin."
ReviewedHOT How can it be possible? Her breath burns my already feverish skin.
SHARP Thrills of desire wind their way around my body as her teeth tug on my sensitive places.
SOFT Swollen lips play counterpoint against the harsh porcelain sting.
ENTANGLED My hands insinuate themselves in the wilderness of her hair, becoming ensnared in the curling creeping tendrils. She instinctively recognizes my need to control the tempo.
ASTONISHED Oh, this mouth! I never realized the talents it had beyond the ability to arouse my annoyance. My only regret is that I did not discover this sooner.
CONTENT Oh gods, I never want this to end. Her tongue strums me like a harp string. The girl plays upon my weaknesses, but at this point, I really do not care.
PASSIONATE Could it be that she feels the quickening of my heart, the heat of my blood as it rushes through my veins? The softness of her mouth gives way to the strength and intensity of her passion.
CRAVING I almost give in. Watching her head plunge between my legs is unbearable. She spreads my knees further apart, heightening the tension that dwells so heavily beneath. Her chest heaves as does mine. Her body cries for more, her skin red as a rose, colored by her longing. I refuse to let her sacrifice her pleasure for mine.
AROUSED Her breasts fit just right in my hands. I cannot help but moan at how perfect they are. I squeeze and pull them, roll them and push them together. The rhythm she has so diligently built falters.
SENSELESS Desire curls in my belly as she recovers the cadence with a faster beat. No more thoughts; only visions of what I want to do to her, of how I want to make her feel.
FULFILLED Both hard and soft, her body welcomes me. She is so beautiful. Face flushed. Burnished lips gasping for air. Eyes pleading with me not to stop.
LONGING So hot. Thighs about my hips, gripping me, forcing me in deeper. So tight. Warmth rippling around me.
BREATHLESS Throat constricting; I cannot breathe. I feel though I am going to die. I force my way through her strangle hold. The harder I thrust, the louder she cries. The sound of her voice sends a spear of lust straight into the depths of my soul.
SWELLING Almost there. Sweet Nimue, I am so close. I give more only to feel her writhe harder against my body. Oh gods, yes! She is screaming my name, demanding more. No turning back. I have no choice but to give in.
SHATTERING It builds around me, taking on a life of its own. Her body coils like a snake, squeezing me until I cannot bear it a second longer. I need her. Oh, gods, yes! I want her wrapped around me like this forever. Feel me! Feel. My. Desire. For. You. Now! Oh, gods, NOW!
~fin
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21 Reviews | 7.38/10 Average
~fans self~ lovely :)
WAOW!!Jummy!!You made my one mouth dry and the other...
Response from notsosaintly (Author of HOT)
This proves the point that you dont need many words to convey your meaning. Hot hot HOT
good lord, it made me wet!!
That was definitely HOT!
Magnificent.
I mean, truly, what else can I say?
Astounding and magnificent and beautiful and arrousing and...
Yes.
sizzling, and yet poetic: not always the easiest combination to pull off, and you've done it very well.
Whoa, that is a SIZZZZZZZZZZZZZLING one-shot. Well done, dear!
I WISH I WAS HERMIONE!
Response from notsosaintly (Author of HOT)
I think the line for that wish (if and only if she gets paired up with Severus, that is) could probably circle the earth at least twice. *lol*
You have a way with words.Tamara
Response from notsosaintly (Author of HOT)
Thanks, Tamara. I'm glad you got your computer problem fixed so you could read it.
OMG! WOW!
Need I say any more.
Response from notsosaintly (Author of HOT)
Perfectly said. If you can say something in not-so-many words, and get the point across, that's the best IMHO. (The whole story's based on that opinion.)
Aaaah! This was SO intense. Loved it. A harsh poetry of passion.
Response from notsosaintly (Author of HOT)
Thank you. I'm glad I was able to portray the passion in so few words.
And I still love this story. :)
Response from notsosaintly (Author of HOT)
Simple and to the point ... :)
Response from Southern_Witch_69 (Reviewer)
Uh-huh...
In this case, I think "hot" is an understatement. I also love the really creative format of this one-shot.
Response from notsosaintly (Author of HOT)
Thank you. I always forget this little one-shot is here, but I'm glad it gets read once in a while!
That was great! *smokes cigarette*
Definitely HOT. And spicy as well. And, in general, some fantastic Hermione/Severus smut. :o) ,Sue.
Response from notsosaintly (Author of HOT)
Thank you kindly!
So HOT!WOW!Sandra
Well, I'm a little late in the game stumbling across this one, but it is very steamy. The adjectives at the start of each paragraph were a little distracting. Still, it was hot.
Response from notsosaintly (Author of HOT)
And I'm a little late in responding (darn real life issues—let's all live online!). Glad you thought it was steamy. The adjectives are a poetic vehicle to inspire each line and actually relate to each line. Now I'm wondering if I had put poetry/prose as a genre. I probably should if I have not. (*goes to check*) Thanks for the review!!
Sexy and fitting, thank you!